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Hallways: Chapter Two

Posted by Viewtiful-Chris - November 8th, 2007


Here it is! After only two days, the next chapter! If you haven't read the first chapter of Hallways, do so now. It will make little sense otherwise. And this time, as paragraph spacing seems to not work, I will put neat empty lines between paragraphs. ANY HELPFUL ADVICE ON IMPROVING IT IS GLADLY APPRECIATED. Enjoy.

And AGAIN, read chapter one first. There's a button on the bottom that says 'All News Posts'.

Chapter Two

Andrew Werdna woke up. He got out of his bed, opened his bedroom door, walked into the hallway, closed his bedroom door, walked down the hallway, and reached a junction leading to the left and right. He turned right, went down that hallway, and came to a wall with seven ladders across it. He climbed up the third ladder from the left and went up a staircase. The floor leveled out and presented him with an eight-way junction. He kept moving forward and through a corridor, opened a door...

Never in this did he change his pace, and he didn't consider any other pathway. Despite all the countless misleading doors, hallways, ladders, and staircases, only the correct ones were chosen.

Finally he reached the room with the four order black painted walls white. He fell through the floor and was prepared again. Two men watched the monitor, one shocked and one sullen.

"AMAZING! Over a thousand dead ends yet he maneuvers through it PERFECTLY!"

"We already knew every step he was going to take. He plays out a random movement sequence mentally as he rests. Probably dreaming it. We record that, and recreate his patterns into the maze. Where the sequence ends is where we place the Origin Room. Every other room he may erroneously walk into, at least by our calculations, will shoot a needle into his chest, I aim it, that paralyzes his body and regresses his brain to an earlier state so we can determine what went wrong or adjust our scanning shell. Each time that happens the complexity of his run-through increases significantly. He hasn't been wrong for quite a while now, so we may be at our peak."

"So you essentially read his mind and test how you believe he'll move?"

"Exactly. Along these lines are endless possibilities. We could read people's intentions, plot out their actions, know everything they know. We're using Andrew to research absolute thought control. The government would be infallible."

"Is this the end, now that your conclusions are invariably correct?"

"No." He sighed. "This is only the first step. He's doing this all subconsciously. It is only the infinite repetition and my recorded voice urging him forwards as he sleeps that keeps our results consistent. What we need to do now is make him realize he's in a maze consciously. The question is that if he knows and understands his predicament, will we still be able to be ahead of his thought?"

"How do you, er-we..." He was recently assigned to assist the other man with the experiment, and he noticed he seemed to prefer the term 'we'. "How do we accomplish this?"

The project leader smirked and said,

"I'm going into his little world."

To be continued...


Comments

Brilliantly written yet again. Make these chapters faster or face my wrath.

I'm glad they rock. BUT I NEED MORE COMMENTORS!!! These are live, all-approved comments people! Don't just view, interact! Thanks Hebacheba, but I need to be fed a little more to stimulate my creative energies. I don't write well just to one person.

If you can draw pretty decent, you should make this a webcomic or something, it's pretty good. I like it.

I can draw hardly at all. So there is absolutely no possibility of me doing that.

BUT SOMEONE ELSE IS WELCOME TO DO SO!

If you quote me of course... and link here.

So...the government is experimenting/researching with brainwashing.

I like the way you think.

Not brain-WASHING, brain-READING! The study is not on how to manipulate someone's mind, but rather to plot it out! To gather all held information, determine their every move, and thusly control them!

I don't think actual mind control is plausible at all outside of the realm of hypnotism, which has already been written to death. Mental analysis is much closer though. This may even be happening in real life.

So keep on reading the series! I've already started writing the third chapter.

THAT IS SO AWESOME!

The series has got me so excited.

Enough praise! I must now compose the third chapter in handwriting... and let it be on Newgrounds soon!

I'll make sure to link you in my sig XD

Do so. Have it say...

CLICK HERE to read Hallways, Viewtiful-Chris's sci-fi epic!

O>O wow u got story skills

dude this is kickass. you better get it published when its done.visit me

I dunno... I'm not sure about publishing it.

Getting into the world of copyright laws and business is a dangerous thing for a thirteen-year old.

interesting, well thought out and well written. I like it.

The suspense! It makes my penis hard. Now show me that pussy for some hard lovin'.

hmmmm.... less gay than Freezepop's Jem... and actually interesting. lemme read further to give you suggestions.

still bad maybe a little better

The only good thing that has ever come out of you was that video of you lipsinking jem That was awesome

Unlike this story

The idea is pretty good, but you honestly write like a retard.

I'm enjoying this a good bit, but every time someone finishes talking you need to state who said what. Other than that your writing is improving...

I've heard that's confusing, but I wanted to leave them unknown so I could just simply explain them with the "recently assigned to assist the other man" phrase.

lol
this story still suck ass

Now this really improved! Though the first paragraph was still kinda gay,with all the repeating words and sentences,but later on it kept going better.